请大家帮我修改一下这篇英语短文
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时间：2023-07-10 00:29
第一段第一行最后一词“Benning”首字母小写即可
第一段第二行括号中“twenty-four”改为“twenty-forth”，表示第二十四个；coodination是什么意思？
第一段第三行最后一词“year”首字母应大写,最好再加上引号，因为前面有“the word”，第四行中的“year”最好也这么改
第一段第四行中“monster”和“beast”删去一个，因为它们都表示“兽”“怪物”，且都是名词（您是要用名词作定语吗？大可不必。其“monster”就是“怪兽”的意思）
第二段第二行第三句“came to their rescue”改为“came to rescue them”好吗？
第二段第三行“To Nian he said,I hear say that you are very capable”改为“He said to Nian,I've heard something about you,people thought that you are very capable”
第三段第三行“he had told people to put up red paper decorations ”改为“he had told people to put up red decorations”会更好一些。毕竟红色装饰品的范围比红纸要大，而且在古代普通百姓家用红色染物品比买弘治要便宜得多、普遍得多
最后一段第四行，“putting up red paper and firing fire-crackers ”改为“putting up red decorations and firing firecrackers”
《习俗》部分：
第二行“red papercuts.becouse”改为“red,because”,同样可以表示“……人们通常用红色装饰门窗……”；“People usually clean house too.becouse”改为“People usually clean house,too.Because”，“too”放句尾而不在前面加逗号是最忌讳的
第三行“Children can get some new clothes or presents from their parents and grandparents”改为“Children usually get some new clothes, presents and money from grown-ups”因为孩子们能够得到的不只是新衣服，还有一些礼物、红包。按照您原来的意思则有局限性，建议您将句意放开一些，范围更广一些
第四行“My family is going to pay New Year's visits to many relatives and friends ring the Spring Festival”改为“My family usually visit other families ring the Spring Festival”因为“is going to”容易让人误认为是“将会”，而后面又有“ring”,意思不免有些混乱；前面“New Year's”与后面“ring the Spring Festival”重复
由于本人能力有限，以上仅供您参考，进行自主检查与修改。如有错误，敬请您指出并海涵！
总之，这是一篇很成功的英语说明文（有些夹叙夹议的色彩），希望您在以后的写作中注意一些特殊的书面要求与书面习惯。祝愿您在英语学习中取得更高的成绩！
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时间：2023-07-10 00:30
Friends
in
our
lives
Everyone
has
his
friends.Friend,
a
precious
word.If
any
doesn't
have
a
friend
that
his
life
will
become
very
boring.Friends
it
is
important
to
us.Like
the
sun
is
our
life.For
I,
for
one,
find
a
close
friend,
such
as
physical
soul.We
found
some
difficults
Sometimes,
at
this
time,
we
need
friends
to
comfort
often
us.We
are
happy,
we
also
need
a
friend
to
listen
to
our
relationship.
Whether
it
occurs,
we
do
not
think
that
silly,
if
we
have
such
a
person
on
one
side.
As
students,
we
can
share
more
time
with
our
friends.
Friendship
in
the
hearts
of
our
young
is
a
pure,
fresh
and
simple.
In
our
world,
there
are
many
impressive
story
of
friendship.
I
have
a
very
good
friend
in
our
classroom.
Her
name
is
Mary.
She
is
a
good
girl,
but
she
was
very
shy
class.Besides
me
that
she
has
a
lot
of
other
girls
who
are
friends.She
is
popular
because
she
is
very
friendly
to
others.
I
really
learned
a
lot
from
her.
Her
work
seriously.
I
treasure
this
man
is
very
much.I
enjoy
themselves
when
we
are
together.
Do
you
have
your
friends?
If
the
answer
is
yes,
you
must
be
a
happy
person.
If
you
do
not
have
friends,
you
are
certainly
very
lonely.Do
Do
you
know
any
friends?
Know
how
valuable
friendship,
we
should
be
very
careful
in
making
friends.
A
true
friend
who
has
a
good
character,
great
ability
and
a
good
heart.
A
true
friend
to
share
all
of
our
pain
and
all
of
our
double
joys.When
We
have
established
a
friendship,
we
should
treasure
and
cherish
it
means
the
words
and
deeds.
Only
in
this
way,
we
can
develop
a
real
friendship,
and
to
maintain
the
sanctity
of
friendship
lights
burning
all
of
our
lives.
Sincere
friendship,
resulting
in
love.
We
are
ordinary
strangers,
we
do
not
know
each
other's
old
age.
We
must,
however,
we
need
to
sentiment.When
other,
we
will
extend
a
hand
to
help
others.Because
love,
our
lives
will
be
better
and
better.
May
not
be
friendship
between
two
people.
May
12,
2008,
a
8.0
earthquake
struck
Sichuan.
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